Improving a comment

Hi blogging world, James here today we had to comment on a buddy's blog then we had to put it into a google drawing that had something telling you how a good comment should have. Then we had to improve the comment that we commented on our partners. We had to make some changes to our comment because some comments are not good because some comments are like 2 - 3  lines long. I made about heaps of changes because it didn't really make sense to me when I read it loud instead of reading in my head. Some bits felt like it didn't make sense to me because some of the sentences were telling a different topic.

After that we had to take a screenshot them put the google drawing onto my blog post. I made my comment better by asking a question and saying what was my favourite part about the topic. I made this change because it sounded boring and it didn't really make sense.
























I think that I did really well writing my comment because I really improved. BLOG YOU LATER.